Junior - Jacob vs Bill on a Bike Racing - Final Copy 3-25-08

On a hot summer day Austin, Texas two boys were racing on their bikes down the hill. They both were going down the hill too fast. Then Bill in the red shirt fell off his bike. Then he was bleeding blood came out of his kneecap because he hit a brick.
Then his friend Jacob called the ambulance on his cell phone and it took him to the hospital. Jacob had to walk both bikes to Bill's house and went in to Bill's mom and told her that he was in the hospital. Bill's mom zoomed to the hospital and ran in side the hospital. Then the doctor was giving Bill some stitches in his kneecap and he had 20 stitches and doctor told him that he can not ride the bike anymore in tell a month that he can not ride his bike and he can walk. So then Bill went home and layed down in bed and waited until the stitches healed.

Next month he went outside and the stitches were gone and he went to Jacob's house and asked him to race again so they did. Next they went to the same hill and they went fast down the hill and Jacob had a wreck and hit a brick and his kneecap was bleeding just like Bill and Bill's mom called Jacob's mom told her that he was in the hospital. Jacob's mom asked Bill's mom can you two go with me so they did. The doctor told Jacob went he get some stitches he said that he can not ride the bike for 1 month.

Next month Jacob went outside and the stitches were gone and he went to Bill's house and asked Bill if he will race again for 1 last time. They went to the top of the hill. They went down the hill fast and none of them wrecked and Bill won the race.






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On a hot summer day Austin,Texas two boys were racing on their bikes down the hill. They both were going down the hill too fast. Then Bill in the red shirt fall off his bike.Then he was bleding blood came out of his kneecap because he hit a brick.

Then his friend Jacob called the ambulance on his cellphone and it took him to the hospital. Jacob had to walk both bikes to Bill's house and went in to Bill's mom and told her that he was in the hospital. Bill'S mom zoomed to the hospital and ran in side the hospital. Then the docter was gaving Bill some stitches in his kneecap and he had 20 stitches and docter told him that he can not ride the bike anymore intell a month that he can not ride his bike and he can walk. So then Bill went home and lay down in bed and wait intell the stitches healed.

Next month he went outside and the stitches were gone and he went to Jacob's house and ask him to race agin so they did. Next they went to the same hill and they went fast down the hilland Jacob had a wreck and hit a brick and his kneecap was bleding just like Billand Bill's mom called Jacob's mom told her that he was in the hospital. Jacob's mom ask Bill's mom can you two go with me so they did. The docter told Jacob went he get some stitches he said that he can not ride the bike for 1 month.

Next month Jacob went outside and the stitches were gone and he went to Bill's house and ask Bill if he will race agin for 1 last time. They went to the top of the hill. They went down the hill fast and none of them wrecked and Bill won the race.junior
Hi junior this is Davis.Great story! I thought it was a story had a great moral and I learned a great lesson from it.I