Allison

Allison
 * Adventure In The Woods**

Allison
 * Adventure In The Woods ** - final draft 3/26/08

One day two girls named Tiffany and Onila woke up on a Saturday morning in their house in Frankford in the county. They got up and Onlia got dressed in a blue outfit like a t-shirt and a skirt Tiffany got dressed in a green outfit. When they were done getting dressed they asked their mom and dad if they could go camping on their land in the woods in the little hut. So their mom said, I guess you can. So they walked in the kitchen and got some food and water. They ran back up stairs and got their sleeping bags. They ran back down stairs and started walking out side in the woods. The excited girls came to the huge brown house. They stared unpacking all the needs in the house. The girls found a big black tunnel it was really dark. So they got their flashlights out of their pocket. In the distance they saw a huge door their was a big box buy the door they opened the box it had book and it had 4 shiny diamonds in it Tiffany picked up the book said put the 4 diamonds in the holes in the door. So Onila put the diamonds in the door. The door opened slowly and they walked in. The door shut they were trapped. They saw another door it had a place on the door where you could put their hands. They put their hands in. They found themselves in the hut again. So the girls cleaned of the table so they could eat. When they were eating they took a bath and went to bed. When they woke up they got dressed and had breakfast. They had a banana and some cereal. When they were done they packed their stuff and started on there way home. When they were home their mom asked if they had fun? Tiffany and Onila said they had a lot of fun so they asked if they could camp out again. Dad said,’’ someday.’’

First draft One day two girls named Tiffana and Onila woke up on a Saturday morning in there house in Frankford in the county. They got up and Onlia got dressed in a blue outfit. Tiffana got dressed in a green outfit. When they were done getting dressed they asked their mom and dad if they could go camping on their land in the woods in the little hut. So their mom said I guess you can. So they walked in the kitchen and got some food and water. They ran back up stiarse and got there sleeping bags. They ran back down stairs and started walking out side in the woods. They came to the hut. They stared unpacking in the woods. The girls found a tunnel it was really dark. So they got their flashlights out of their pocket. In the distance they saw a huge door their was a big box buy the door they opened the box it had book and it had 4 diamonds in it Tiffana picked up the book said put the 4 diamonds in the in the holes in the door. So Onila put the diamonds in the door. The door opened they walked in. The door shut they were trapped. They saw another door it had a place on the door where you could put there hands. They put there hands in. They found them selfs in the hut again. So they cleaned of the table so they could eat. When they were eating they took a bath and went to bed. When they woke up they got dressed and had breakfast. They had a banana and some cereal. When they were done the they packed there stuff and started on there way home. When they were home their mom asked if they had fun? Tiffana and Onila said they had a lot of fun so they asked if they could camp out again. Dad said someday.

Hi Allison it's me Isobella, I read your story and I thought it was great but I don't know how they can eat dinner while having a bath? I also wanted to know where they found the little hut.