DylanW

Dylan W - revised 3\12\07
One day in June on a hot and sunny day, there were two frogs named Hopper and Hoppy that were on a farm in Russia hopping away from the very hungry fox. They went over the fence through the chicken coup and finally they lost him from under a cart. The fox was too hungry to try and find them so he ran away to find something else to eat. Then the two frogs saw a giant can. Hopper said, "Look at that giant can!". Hoppy said "That's not a can that's a pail of milk, do you know anything?" "Lets jump inside!" "OK." PLOP!!!! In they went. After a while they became tired, they said "WE CAN'T GET OUT, WE CAN'T GET OUT!!!!!!" Hoppy became so tired he could not swim anymore. So he began to sink to the bottom, and he drowned. The other one couldn't find a way to get out. Soon the milk turned to cream and it was getting thicker and thicker until it turned to butter and the frog that did not drown was able to stop swimming and rest but it got too slippery that he started to slide all over the place, but soon he stopped sleding and then he did get to rest. When he caught his breath, he was able to jump out of the pail and hop to saftey. The mean fox was gone and the frog was safe. The frog went back to his home in the river behind the giant oak tree. THE END!!!

+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ Dylan W -- One day, there were two frogs that were on a farm hiding from a fox. When they finally found a hiding spot, they saw a giant can. One of the frogs said, "Look at that giant can!". The other one said that's not a can that's a pail of milk, do you know anything?" "Lets jump inside!" "OK." PLOP!!!! In they went. After a while they became tired, they said "WE CAN'T GET OUT, WE CAN'T GET OUT!!!!!!" One of them became so tired he could not swim anymore. So he began to sink to the bottom, and he drowned. The other one couldn't find a way to get out. Soon the milk turned to cream and it was getting thicker and thicker until it turned to butter and the frog that did not drown was able to stop swimming and rest. When he caught his breath, he was able to jump out of the pail and run to saftey. The fox was gone and the frog was safe.
 * COMMENTS?**

"I heard…" that 2 frogs were hiding from a fox. They went in to a pail of milk. The frogs got tired, but couldn't get out. One frog got so tired it drowned. The milk started to turn in to butter. The only frog left got to rest after the milk turned in to butter, that's how it got out. The frog got out and the fox was gone.

"I liked…" the humor in the frogs. They really had a great personality too.

"I wondered…" If the fox got anything to eat or came back to get the frog.

"I was looking for an example of…" what happened next. I kinda thought it just ended, so maybe you could make it longer. Maybe add a little more adventures that the frog or frogs did. Even before or after they got stuck in the milk.

"I had a question about…" What happened after the frog got out.

"I was looking for an example of..." A book or a mortal of the story. Like what would add more to make a mortal or what you would do next. What kind of frogs were they or what color of frogs were they? How did they know it was milk, was the glass clear? Do the frogs have names, because it's hard to know what frog is talking. Other than that it's really good. One more thing though could you maybe make it longer too! -Moldwoves!

Dear Dylan, I heard....That the frogs were followed by the fox, but the frogs hid and the fox left. Also Hopper and Hoppy went in to the milk can one drowned and then the milk turned into butter and the frog got out. I liked.... your story bacause it is about animals and I love animals!! I wondered.....wich was the name of the frog that drowned? I was looking for an example of......a king that turned into a frog and the princess had to kiss him so he turned int the king again. -Constanza!!

++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ From Dylan Wood, 4-13-07 Hoppy is the one who drowned. I like animals too. Theres a lot of stories that are based on that, which one are you talking about?

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