Gabby

By Gabby -- Revised 3/12/07
Long ago there was a black and white Cat and a brown and white Dog that were married. Every time Dog came home from work Cat said "she was too tired to fix dinner". Dog fixed french fries for dinner for both of them. Then one day he was getting tired of fixing dinner. So he hid in the cupboard to watch her to see if she was really sick and he found out that she was not sick. All she did when Dog was gone was she played with Kitten. That is why Dog hid in the cupboard. Then Cat thought Dog was gone. Then Cat started playing with Kitten. Then Dog jumped out of the cupboard. Cat stuck a marble in her cheek because she saw Dog and she did not want to get into trouble by Dog because if he found out that she was tried because she played with Kitten all day then he get mad but alredy because he saw her. She put a marble in her mouth to make Dog think she was sick. Then she told the rest of the dogs she had a toothache. Dog was so mad he started chasing her around the house. That is why dogs chase cats today. ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ By Gabby -- Long ago there was a Cat and Dog that were married. Every time Dog came home Cat said she was to tired to fix dinner. Dog fixed dinner for both of them. Then one day he was getting tried of fixing dinner. So he hid in the cupboard. Then Cat thought Dog was gone. Then Cat started playing with Kitten. Then Dog jumped out of the cupboard. Cat stuck a marble in her cheek because she saw Dog. Then she told the rest of the dogs she had toothache. Dog was so mad he started chasing her around the house. That is why dogs chase cats today.
 * COMMENTS?**

===I heard some pretty cool legends and stories,but I've never heard one like this. I liked that you described things,and was willing to explain. I wondered why the cat put a marble in her mouth.I didn't get why she had to put a marble in her mouth to fake a toothache. I was looking for a little bit of reasoning in the story/legend after Dog caught Cat fooling around,and more detail. I thought that maybe you could put a little bit more detail into your story/legend.I would like to hear more in your story. I think that you should put a little more detail into your writing.I like the starting in your story/legend. Why was Cat so lazy? I like that you connect the story/legend to today.I'd like it more if you put more details and wrote a little bit more.I really like that you had some correct punctuation.Maybe you could fit a little bit more into your story.I like the starting of the story,and think that you could write more.I I think that you could add more details about the surroundings,like the town they live in,& the kind if neighborhood they live in.The story would flow better id you told about Cat learning her lesson,or not learning her lesson.===

**summer07**
That was a very nice story but,I wondered about what the cupboard was like. Was it big or small? Was it cramped? How did the cat get tiered, was it because the cat was playing with the kitten? Did she go to work? Or did she just sit on her butt all day. I liked the fact that you didn't pick a legend that was going to involve something like how the sun shines. I herd that the dog was angry why? I was looking for an example of the dog like telling the cat off or something.It was cool that the dog victoriuos becase I liked dogs more than cats. I'm allergic to cats, so I don't like them. Poke-A-Doke

I liked that you revised your story.I think that you could use a little more commas though.I also like that you used more details,and explained things better.Why didn't Cat make dinner in the first place?I wrote more to my story to.
 * summer07

Dear,Gaby

I heard that you writed that Dogs and Cats eta freanch fries, Ido not think they eat that !! I also liked that you writed tht the cat stuck a marble on his mauth. I have a question why did you did your story whith Cats and Dogs ? Daniel/cms +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ April 12, 2007 Dear Daniel, I like the comment you gave me! I don`t think they eat french fries either. I chose Cats and Dogs because I wanted to. from, Gabby +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++

Dear Gabby I heard that yourr story is about cats and dogs and a black and white cat. Iliked it very much bacause is funny and has details.I wonder were your story takes palce. I have A question From where did you got that Idea? Because it is very funny. ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ April 12, 2007 Dear Alexandra, I liked the comment you gave me. The story takes place in the house. Because in one of our centers we got to pick a story out and I picked this story. From, Gabby

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Your Friend,

Alexandra Grullon**