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The Mysterious Dark Woods - Final Draft 3-25-08
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It was a hot summer day in the mountains of Colorado. The mountains were so beautiful with the hot sun beaming down on them. It was so hot outside that the birds didn't even want to fly. It was July 18, 2000. There was a small, 10 year old log cabin near the town of Malikkoto, Colorado with three young kids in the log cabin named, Tahnee which is three years old, Savana which is 14 years old, and Mark which is 18 years old. "I hate my mom" said Tahnee. Tahnee's mom was going to have a baby. Tahnee was not used to having a younger sibling. She had always been the baby of the family and she was very angry with her mother. "Now Tahnee you will get over it sooner or later" said her mother. Tahnee stomped off into her room with her hands on her hips. When Tahnee got to her room she saw her big sister Savana sitting on her bed. "What is the matter Tahnee?" said her big sister Savana. "Mommy is going to have a baby and I am angry at her." "Mom is going to have a baby!?" "Yep." Savana put her head into her pillow and scram. Savana, Tahnee’s big sister hadn't heard about this so-called baby until just now so she was furious with her mother. Tahnee and Savana did not like the idea of their mom having the baby. Just thinking about it gave them the chills. They spent half of the day trying to figure out what they were going to do. Then finally something popped into Savana's head. "We could just run away.” said Savana. "That is a great idea." said Tahnee. Savana wanted to go somewhere safe so nothing would happen to her little sister but that is not what Tahnee thought. Since Tahnee was the youngest kid in the house she always got her way. "I want to go to the mysterious dark forest" said Tahnee. Since Tahnee always got her way Savana was forced to go to the mysterious dark woods, but she had to deal with it. "Okay now we have to make a plan of how we will get out of the house." said Savana. "I know what we can do. We can tell mom that the bags of clothes are our food baskets." said Tahnee. So they packed their favorite outfits in a purple bag with pink polka dots on it. Tahnee's favorite outfit was her pajamas with pink flowers all over them and Savana's favorite outfit was a purple skirt and a pink and purple polka dotted shirt. They were finally ready to go at 6:00pm . When they got into the living room and mom asked them where they were going. Tahnee almost said that they were running away, but Savana interrupted her and said that they were going on a picnic at Savana's friend, Ashley's house. Their mother said okay but be back soon in time for supper. Then off they went. They walked for about three hours. When they got to the mysterious dark woods it was 9:00pm . So they left there house at about 6:00pm . Savana thought that it would be a good idea to rest here for the night. So they both rested there for the night. The air got cooler. The big tall trees waved back and fourth. The cool breeze felt rally nice. They both slept peacefully for about an hour. Then suddenly… they heard "OUCH!" "What was that?" said both of them. "I think it came from behind that bush" said Tahnee scarily. Then out from behind the bush came their big brother, named Mark. Mark was 18 years old. He looked like a big giant leaf monster but, they knew it was Mark. Tahnee ran over to Mark and hugged him. "What are you doing here?!" said Savana. "I over heard you talking about what you were going to do. So now we are all going home." said Mark. "Okay." said Savana tiredly. " You can't tell mom that we ran away." said Tahnee. "Okay I won't." said Mark. THE END!

First Draft: It was a hot summer day in the mountains of Colorado. The mountains were so beautiful with the hot sun beaming down on them. It was so hot outside that the birds didn't even want to fly. It was July 18, 2000. There was a small log cabin near the town of Malikkoto with three young kids in it named Tahnee which is three years old, Savana which is 14 years old, and Mark which is 18 years old. "I hate my mom" said Tahnee. Tahnee's mom was going to have a baby. Tahnee was not used to having a younger sibling. She had always been the baby of the family and she was very angry with her mother. "Now Tahnee you will get over it sooner or later" said her mother. Tahnee stomped off into her room with her hands on her hips. When Tahnee got to her room she saw her big sister Savana sitting on her bed. "What is the matter Tahnee?" said her big sister Savana. "Mommy is going to have a baby and I am angry at her." "Mom is going to have a baby!?" "Yep." Savana put her head into her pillow and scram. Savana hadn't heard about this so called baby until just now so she was furious with her mother.

Tahnee and Savana did not like the idea of the baby. Just thinking about it gave them the chills. They spent half of the day trying to figure out what they were going to do. Then finally something popped into Savana's head. "We could just run away."said Savana. "That is a great idea." said Tahnee. Savana wanted to go somewhere safe so nothing would happen to her little sister but that is not what Tahnee thought. Since Tahnee was the youngest kid in the house she always got her way. "I want to go to the mysterious dark forest" said Tahnee. Since Tahnee always got her way Savana was forced to go to the mysterious dark woods, but she had to deal with it. "Okay now we have to make a plan of how we will get out of the house." said Savana. "I know what we can do. We can tell mom that the bags of clothes are our food baskets." said Tahnee. So they packed their favorite outfits in a purple bag with pink polka dots on it. Tahnee's favorite outfit was her pajamas with pink all over it and Savana's favorite outfit was a purple skirt and a pink and purple shirt. When they got into the living room and mom asked them where they were going. Tahnee almost said that they were running away, but Savana interrupted her and said that they were going on a picnic at Savana's friend, Ashley's house. Their mother said okay but be back soon in time for supper. Then off they went. They walked for about three hours. When they got to the mysterious dark woods it was 9:00pm. So they left there house at about 6:00pm. Savana thought that it would be a good idea to rest here for the night. So they both rested there for the night.

The big tall trees waved back and fourth. The cool breeze felt really nice. They both slept peacefully for about an hour. Then suddenly they heard "OUCH!" "What was that?" said both of them. "I think it came from behind that bush" said Tahnee scardley. Then out from behind the bush came their big brother, named Mark. Mark was 18 years old. Tahnee ran over to Mark and hugged him. "What are you doing here?!" said Savana. "I over heard you talking about what you were going to do. So now we are all going home." said Mark. "Okay." said Savana. " You can't tell mom that we ran away." said Tahnee. "Okay I won't." said Mark. THE END!

Hi Cheyenne it's me Courtney I like your story because lot of detail.I wonded why you had Mark which is 18