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Jordon - **Final Draft** 3-25-08


 * Old Red and Jook Went Hunting.**

Old Red was asleep in the woods in his cabin. Jook was awake. Old Red was waking up then he was awake. Jook is Old Red's dog. Jook was black and white. He was a hunting dog. He had been with Old Red since he was a puppy.

Old Red wanted to catch a doe for Jook. He was setting up traps to catch does and bucks. Buck and does are deer. The traps were made of metal and they had spikes. Old Red came home from the woods with a big doe. Jook was waiting at the door for him to come home.

Jook ran to the door. He ran out into the yard to eat the doe. Old Red told Jook to come in when you are done eating. First Jook ate the leg, second Jook ate the body, third Jook ate the head; and last Jook ate the tail. The next day Old Red got his foot into a steel trap. Jook had to help Old Red home. Then Old Red never went hunting again.


 * First Draft** - Old Red was asleep in the woods in his cabin. Jook was awake. Old Red was waking up then he was awake. Jook is Old Red's dog. Jook was black and white. He was a hunting dog. He had been with Old Red since he was a puppy.

Old Red wanted to catch a doe for Jook. He was setting up traps to catch does and bucks. The traps were made of metal and they had spikes. Old Red came home from the woods with a doe. Jook was waiting for him to come home.

Jook ran to the door. He ran out into the yard to eat the doe. Old Red is telling Jook to come in when you are done. First Jook ate the leg, second Jook ate the body, third Jook ate the head last Jook ate the tail.

Old Red got his foot into a trap. Jook had to help Old Red home. Then Old Red never went hunting again.

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