emily

THE BLOODY HOOK
The reporters had been on the radio all day, though Gabby haden't paid much atention to them. Some crazy man had escaped from the state asylum. They were calling him the Hook Man since he had lost his right arm and replaced it with a hook. They called him Hook for short. He was a killer, and everyone in the region was warned to keep a look out and tell a reporter about anything that seems suspicous. But that didn't interest Gabby at all, she was too worried about her date with Danny her boyfriend. After calling her friends over and over again Gabby finaly found a blue outfit which was the latest style. Gabby was waiting on her front porch so when her boyfriend Danny came she didn't have to make him wait. They went to a drive-in-movie with another couple named Austin and Kortney, when the movie was over they took Austin and Kortney home. On the way to Gabby's house their tire popped. Gabby was listening to the radio so Danny had to change the tire by himself. The annouser came on and it said the same thing that it did before she left but this time Gabby paid full atention it said  A Crazy Killer Called The Hook Man is LOOSE and could be Anywhere! '' Hurry and get in the car when your done. I'm scared That crazy killer could be anywhere! yelped Gabby. Danny got in the car, But he wanted to listen to the radio. So Gabby said let's get out of here now! Danny stepped on the gas and the car went roaring down the road. He stopped the car in her drive way, he waited. She scaredly and terrifedly jumped out of the car and slammed the door shut and then...Gabby screamed! Danny leapt out of the car and saw it A Bloody Hook! hanging on the car door handle. When we stopped to change the tire Hook must of got under the car and hooked his hook onto the door and when we drove off we must of yanked it off his arm! Are you Crazy? He killed someone and didn't yell when we pulled it off because it wasn't even attached! And they both ran inside like a jackrabbit. And ever since then Hook has been looking for precious little Gabby! +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ By Emily -- The reporters had been on the radio all day, though Gabby haden't paid much atention to them. Some crazy man had escaped from the state asylum. They were calling him the Hook Man since he had lost his right arm and replaced it with a hook. They called him Hook for short. He was a killer, and everyone in the region was warned to keep a look out and tell a reporter about anything that seems suspicous. But that didn't interest Gabby at all, she was too worried about her date with Danny her boyfriend.After calling her friends over and over again Gabby finaly found a blue outfit which was the latest style. Gabby was waiting on her front porch so when her Danny came she didn't have to make him wait. They went to a drive-in-movie with another couple named Austin and Kortney, when the movie was over they took Austin and Kortney home. On the way to Gabby's house their tire popped. Gabby was listening to the radio so Danny had to change the tire by himself. The annouser came on and it said the same thing that it did before she left but this time Gabby paid full atention it said  A Crazy Killer Called The Hook Man is LOOSE and could be Anywhere! '' Hurry and get in the car when your done. I'm scared That crazy killer could be anywhere! Danny got in the car, But he wanted to listen to the radio. So Gabby said let's get out of here now! Danny stepped on the gas and the car went roaring down the road. He stopped the car in her drive way he waited. She stepped out of the car and shut the door and then...Gabby screamed! Danny leapt out of the car and saw it A Bloody Hook! hanging on the car door. And ever since then Hook has been looking for precious little Gabby! dear emily, how did the hook man escape?and I liked your story very much just that it was a little to violent. MilkShake writes:** I heard, That the girl got ready went to a movie on the way home the car got a flat tire. Then the lady got out of the car and then screamed. Looked at the door and there was a bloody hook on the door handle. I liked, the voice in your story.You described a lot of interesting like the part when the girl gets freaked out and then saw the ut and then saw the bloody hook. I wonder how the HOOK MAN approached the car with out the people in the car hearing. Why didn't the hook man scream when his hook got yanked off. I was looking for a example of good detail and descriptions of how the characters felt. I got what i wanted from your story I had a question about Why didn't the hook man scream when his hook got yanked off. Manuel writes: Dear Emily, I heard that a dangerous hook man was after gabby when danny and gabby and austin and kortney where in a date.And they almost got killed because the hookman was very close.I liked the part of gabby going to the movies with her boyfriend and the hookman chasing them.I wonderd how did the hookman escape?
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Dear Emily, I heard that the hook man escaped from jail.how did he get out? I liked that that it heard real.and I wondered why didn't the hook man scream when his arm break? +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ Dear Milkshake, Read my answer to Gabriel on 41207 and it will tell you because you asked the same question! +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ Dear Manuel, Hi! Thank you sooooooooooooooooooooo much for asking me that question about how Hook got free because you gave me a verrrry good idea! I will put that in. I thought the part when Hook chased Gabrielle-Gabby too! +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++

Dear Gabriel, Hi! Thank you sooooooooooooooooooooo much for asking me that question about how Hook got free because you gave me a very good idea! I will put that in. His hook was bearly attached to his arm because it wriped off before.

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